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Sig jeres mening, men har nok ikke tænkt mig at rette i det, da jeg selv synes teksten har en god opbygning. Men ko mmed din mening

(ved godt det ikke hedder "When my body tells me to not", men det lød bedre xD - KUNSTNERISK FRIHED :P )



I long,
Long for your teeth,
Your touch,
As you bite my neck, and strangle me,
Make my eyes flash.
I long for your hands, for your tongue,
As you hit me, tease me...
Just the way you treat me.
You love me, you hate me, you make me long for more.
To see the next line...
I long for everything you do to me.
I hide my scars, hoping for more.
Teaching myself to walk, with a broken leg.
Nothing can keep me away.
You put your amazing spell on me,
So I will always long for you.
For your magic, for your pain.
For your hands hitting rain.
I make myself wake up, when my body tells me to not.
I long for your breath, your heartbeat.
You gave me marks, you gave me scars.
You made me bleed, you made me scream.
You broke my hand, you broke my leg.
One day, soon one day;
This longing for you, will keep me away...
Forever

Det er ret intenst. Det gør næsten ondt at høre om jeg'et. Det helt forfærdeligt, men samtidigt er det ret ynkeligt. Især det med det brækkede ben som hun går på. Det lyder som en forelskelse der er foreviget.

Nu tog jeg det forgivet at det var en kvinde, men det ved jeg rent faktisk ikke. Det kunne også være ret spaced hvis det var en fyr der fortalte. *Leger lige med tanken*